Do you have a problem with me wearing sunglasses at night?
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Jun 4, 2015

c2 p8 (Injury TW)

Transcript: The woman flips open a badge that is definitely real and not fake. "I am Agent Fukuda, CSI, investigating the DeFuria house collapse. Can we talk?"

"I...guess, yeah," Kalo replies, not really sure what else he can do.

Fukuda gets right into it. "Did Becca or her parents seem at odds with someone?"

"They're at odds with each other all the time," Kalo answers.

"Ah...I see. Please, tell me everything you remember about the incident." Fukuda flips open a notebook. She doesn't take off her sunglasses despite the dimness of the room.

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Jun 4, 2015

c2 p8 (Injury TW)


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Jun 4, 2015

Oly-RRR

Squinting at the ID, not convinced it's a real ID.

And I'm still impressed with the whole house collapse scene, it wasn't something I expected from this story, actually surprising and all, good job!


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Jun 5, 2015

spiremint

@Oly-RRR: what EVER could make you think that badge could be FAKE? >:)

I really appreciate your thought on the house collapse. It's a very important scene, and I've rewritten it so many times to try to make it work correctly for the story at large... as we get further it will mean more and more.


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Jun 5, 2015

Oly-RRR

@spiremint: I know that feeling, it's what I do with important scenes too, rewriting again and again! The gist often stays the same but it's so important to get nuances right.


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Aug 11, 2018

IronDog

I feel as if this is where we start to form opinions about certain characters.


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